Keith Bennett of New Forest Poets adjudicated the Ode to April poetry competition and commented on the high standard of entries.



Highly Commended: Gill Hollands with April
Keith Bennett of New Forest Poets adjudicated the Ode to April poetry competition and commented on the high standard of entries.



Highly Commended: Gill Hollands with April
by Hermione Laake
Adjudicator: Writer, Editor, and lecturer Calum Kerr.
Our adjudicator was writer and lecturer Calum Kerr. Calum’s recent Flash Fiction project, “365” was featured on BBC Radio 4, and can be listened to via the link on his website via the “news”link (Read by Dame Diana Rigg, Kenneth Cranham, Rory Kinear, and Emilia Fox). The background effects really bring the pieces to life.
1st place – Gill Hollands, for her piece Captive – Calum said he was suitably terrified by Gill’s prose. Gill is becoming a regular winner. Can you knock her off the top spot?
2nd place – A Kind of Loving by Catherine Mortimore, our very own secretary Celia Livesey, (Celia is becoming quite a pro’ at giving our competitors a run for their money).
3rd place – newcomer, Tania Travis, with Opening Paragraph.
Highly Commended:
David Eadsforth in 1stplace. (David is also on our committee, as Events Manager.)
Hazel Donnelly in 2ndplace, with Time Lock.
Calum Kerr gave written feedback to all our winners, and highly commended.
Calum spoke about Flash Fiction Day, and his 365 Flash Fiction venture. He invites you to tidy up your entries and enter them for the competition—more details on the website.
‘Write 300 words on a familiar UK location by an ‘overseas tourist”
The HWS Travel Writing Competition was adjudicated by Carole Hastings who last year won British Guild of Travel Writers’ New Travel Writer of the Year 2012 Award.
Carole Hastings writes:
The winning elements that I looked for were the same ones as the British Guild of Travel Writers use for the New Travel Writer of the Year Competition :
All the entries were good pieces of writing. As James McConnachie spoke of “when to strain against the leash” this served as a creative guiding light in helping me choose the winners. Leashes were strained to great effect…
First place: Gill Hollands – a Stowaway’s view on arriving in Southampton
Second place: Sue Spiers – a poem on Ishiguro at the Spinnaker, Portsmouth
Third place: Rosie Travers – powerful imagery of Hengistbury Head [This was Rosie’s first HWS competition entry]
Highly commended
Gopi Chandroth – Driving in Oxford – humorous piece
Paul Airey – Quadrophenia – highly original piece on a visit to Brighton
By Hermione Laake
Hermione began by presenting 3rd Prize to Anthony Ridgway for his entry for December’s competition.
Hermione pointed out that Anthony’s piece (a letter to Santa in the style of Dickens) was about the importance of seeing past the disability to the person within
Flash fiction Competition:
Our adjudicator was Paul Bavister. Paul has worked at Macmillan and has published 3 books of poetry. Paul teaches creative writing at Birkbeck College, London. Paul has also been a speaker at the Winchester Writers’ Conference.
Paul was unable to attend. However, he provided our winners and highly commended with helpful guidance and comments.
Book prizes were awarded to 1st, 2nd and 3rd places
1st Place – The Final Chapter by Anne Eckersley
2nd Place – The Burglar by Georgie Jensen (Karin Groves)
3rd Place – Wifebeater by Gill Hollands
Highly commended/joint 4th
Balloons by Liz Symonds
Undone by Sally Wood
‘Write a letter to Father Christmas in the style of Charles Dickens’
Bevis Hillier, John Betjeman’s biographer and ex-editor of Connoisseur adjudicated the December competition. He was impressed with writing in all entries.
First: Joan Robinson-Harris – Captain Hawden for Jo Toughey
Second: Anne Eckersley – Wackford Squeers
Third: Anthony Ridgway – Tiny Tim
Highly Commended: Paul Firman – Ebenezer Scrooge
‘Write a Review’
Elizabeth Barnett, Editor of Hampshire Life announced the winners of the November competition and encouraged writers to contact her with ideas for articles.
First: Celia Livesey – Henry V at the New Globe
Second: Gill Hollands – Prometheus
Third: Clarice B – Olympic ceremony
Highly Commended: Gill Hollands – Immortal 3D Experience
‘Write a cover letter to a publisher’
Adjudicator: Mary Chamberlain, freelance editor
Mary Chamberlain began by pointing out that letters would be addressed to an agent and not an editor. The agent’s role, Mary reminded us, was to find a suitable publisher for the writer.
Mary found three good entrants for this month’s competition which were each awarded a 1st, 2nd, and 3rd prize on the basis of the interest they sparked in the reader, and whether they were correctly presented and addressed.
1st place – Claire Buckley
2nd place – Gill Hollands
3rd place – Nita Saini
The writers read their letters out. Gill Hollands’ second letter drew laughs from all, as the author professed to being a burglar, there were obvious spelling mistakes throughout, and it ended with the salutation: “love and kisses.”
Hermione Laake: Chair of Competitions, was asked to read Nita Saini’s letter, in her absence.
“Mary gave excellent and very thorough feedback,” said many of the attendees on the evening.
The feedback given
Mary stressed the importance of properly addressing your correspondence. If you do not get this right, said Mary, then editors will not feel connected to you sufficiently. “Find out about where Mary Chamberlain comes from.” Mary reminded us that agents like letters to be addressed to them specifically, by name. Do your homework on this, said Mary. “Look them up; [similarly] don’t forget your postcode as an agent will be too busy to look it up.”
Mary emphasized the importance of assertive language, stressing, “Don’t use, I believe, or I feel.” Some personal information was a good idea, and where your work would sit in the current market was also something writers should address in letters to agents.
With regard to the presentation of the letter Mary said that staples were preferable and that paper clips were not acceptable. One page was enough.
One letter with the nom de plume, Jane Austen, Mary Chamberlain found particularly intriguing. Mary put this letter in the Highly Commended category as it did not have an email or postcode. This letter was written by our very own, meticulous secretary, Celia Livesey. However, we soon discovered the reason for the lack of email and postcode; this letter was written by somebody from the past. Thus the evening not only began on an historical note, with our Pro Vice Chancellor, Liz Stuart drawing on the history of Winchester University, it also ended on an historical note, yet with a clever twist, as the historical was married with the creative in the shape of a fictional letter.
Becky Bagnell of the Lindsay Literary Agency adjudicated the monthly competition which was to create an amateur detective in 250 words.
Competition Winners
1st place: David Eadsforth with Street Level
2nd place: Maddy Woosnam with All That Jazz
3rd place: Honey Stavonhagen with Hope Green -The Blind Detective
All winners received a signed copy of a PD James novel.
Celia Livesey won the prize draw for those members who renewed their HWS before the July 31st deadline.
‘Write a 1000 word short story’
1st Prize – Joan Robinson-Harris
2nd Prize – Claire Buckley
3rdPrize – Di Castle
Highly Commended: Susan Piper, Jenny Brooks and Lovell Taylor. Congratulations!