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  • Alys Blakeway talks about Victorian writer, Charlotte Mary Yonge

    Alys Blakeway, Special Guest, Hampshire Writers’ Society 13th December 2022

    Report by Sarah Noon


    Charlotte Mary Yonge was a bestselling Victorian writer born in August 1823. She is recognised as having changed the name of Eastley, to Eastleigh – the spelling that we use today. Our speaker this evening, Alys Blakeway, chairs the Charlotte Yonge Fellowship and is talking to us about about the writer and her books.


    2023 is the bicentenary of Charlotte Yonge’s birth and Alys tells us that tonight is special for her as it is the first event linked to Charlotte Yonge’s anniversary (Alys refers to Charlotte Yonge as “C.M.Y”). Other events taking place in 2023 will be based at Otterbourne Church, Hampshire Records Office, the Winchester City Museum and Winchester Cathedral. Alys also tells us that Palgrave Macmillan are publishing a book Charlotte Mary Yonge: Writing in the Victorian Age. She is hoping the University library will purchase it. There is also an event Leeds Trinity University in June as well as an event here at the University of Winchester.
    Alys then goes on to talk about the writer herself. A profoundly Christian woman, CMY was born and lived all her life in Otterbourne. She never married (“…she didn’t need to…”), living off inherited wealth. Alys explains that her writing had a universal appeal “… from servants to soldiers; from priests to princesses.” Her bestseller, The Heir of Redclyffe, earned her £1000 – a considerable sum at the time. Allys tells us how Yonge gave this money away to missionaries on the Pacific Islands. Her books “… fell out of favour…” in the 20th Century due to changes in social attitudes – some perceived the tone of her writing to be somewhat “preachy.” This, says Alys, overshadowed her “…vivid characterisation and lively dialogue.”


    CMY began writing in 1838 and continued writing until her death in 1901 – writing both fiction and non-fiction, historical and contemporary, for adults and children. We are reminded that this coincides almost exactly with Queen Victoria’s reign and reflects the huge changes that occurred during that period. Alys explains that due to the high quality of the writing, Yonge’s books remain “…good reads…”
    Alys explains that there were two main influences on CMY’s work: her father and John Keeble. Her father was deeply religious and spent many years in the army. Keeble was Yonge’s parish priest as well as a family friend. Alys is keen to point out that these were “…influencers, not dictators.” They would read her work, offer criticism and encourage re-writing. However, her writing continued for many years after the two men had passed away.
    Allys tells us that Charlotte was a “…solitary child…” and therefore began storytelling at an early age – to her imaginary family of ten boys and eleven girls! These imaginary brothers and sisters were the early formations of characters that ended up in CMY’s books. She did however, have many cousins. Alys also describes CMY as a “…a keen observer…” basing many elements of her writing on real life. She goes on to say how she would often write down conversations she had with others for reference (a transcript of one survives to this day) “… hence the unstilted dialogue.”


    CMY did not need to write for money, but “… wrote because she could not help it.” However, in 1876 her brother Julian was declared bankrupt and much of her earnings went to support his family. Alys tells us that her later works are “… rather like potboilers” causing her to ponder whether this was as a result of feeling pressure of writing more in order to provide for her brother’s family.


    CMY’s good characters have to struggle to overcome their faults and gain sympathy from the reader. She wrote about struggles that were close to her – for example the lack of adequate drainage in Winchester – close to where she lived. The town had no proper sewerage because people refused to pay for it. This issue forms the plot in three of her novels. She also wrote about Women’s Rights. Alys explains that as the Victorian attitudes towards education changed over the years, CMY’s did too.
    Having explained a little of CMY’s life and influences, Alys ends her talk exploring CMY’s techniques as a writer. She says that CMY “…introduces human drama and adventure into many of her books for adults and children alike.” Like many other Victorian authors, her stories were serialised. Therefore, she had to create suspense in order to ensure that readers would buy the next instalment. She used adventure to do this, but then also used that adventure to develop the characters. Alys demonstrates this by reading us a passage from one her books. CMY used adventure to develop plot and character in her family sagas too (Alys gives us the example of The Daisy Chain) and gives CMY credit for showing “…clichéd characters and plots in a new light.” Several examples of established characters are given (The governess, the stepmother, the hero), all of whom have been slightly altered by CMY to provide a new perspective.
    Alys ends her fascinating talk with the summary “A born writer, a surprisingly unconventional novelist, a good read and a window on the Victorian age.”

  • David Keighley

    Special Guest, Hampshire Writers’ Society 8th November 2022

    Report by Sarah Noon


    David published a selection of poems in 2020 entitled Poems, Piety and Psyche (David’s three main interests in life) described as “Progressive poems for rebellious Christians.” He is a performance poet, was a priest for 40 years, and a qualified psychotherapist. He has also been a science teacher and a remedial teacher. David tells us that he has written 4160 sermons – the equivalent of eight War & Peace’s or six Bibles!


    David begins his talk by telling us that the room is a “safe space” and that some of his views may be challenging (they’re meant to be), but that he hopes his views don’t upset people too much. He points out that we all have our own views. His intention with his work is to “…demythologise Christian doctrines…” in an attempt to prevent young people leaving the Church – to challenge our perceptions of the Bible, rather than to give up on religion. He feels that many young people today don’t believe in the miracles of the Bible, and therefore ditch religion, rather than explore its deeper meaning, adding that in today’s world particularly, “we need love, compassion, forgiveness and tolerance.”
    His book was originally published in America, by an academic publishing house in Oregon. He claims that British publishers were not keen on his brand of poetry. They wanted something more “meek and mild.” He explains that the poems are organised into clusters – creation and Bible poems, God’s hell and incarnation, Christmas and Nativity stories, Jesus and the Crucifixion, Church and the ministry, culture and the cosmos and then an epic poem at the end which summarises everything. Not his choice, David adds, but the publisher’s choice.
    His objectives he tells us are “…to revitalise the church and reshape its future for the current declining congregation.” He goes on to tell us that the amount of clergy is declining, fewer young people are entering the church and money is also declining. With all of this in mind, David aims to get people to explore the Church’s meaning in today’s world, rather than to simply abandon it. In 1963, David informs us, there were 20,000 clergy in the Church of England. Today there are just 7,000.

    David claims that because young people are very scientifically literate today, they therefore do not believe in the idea of miracles. David hopes that his poetry will urge people to consider that there is more to Christianity than that. He feels that Christianity is often taught as history and as something that actually happened, whereas the New Testament is “… mythology and stories…” and is to do with …”the meaning behind what it says.”

    David goes on to read us the first poem in his book entitled Horses for Courses. An angry tone runs through his poems – he says he’s angry about what is happening to his Church. There are many things going on that make people angry – war, consumerism, child abuse etc., and with these things happening, where does that leave the place of the Church?
    David explains to us where he believes the challenge to Christian doctrine started. He believes that it began with the school nativity play. The problem is, he says, that children believe the literal story, rather than exploring a deeper meaning. We should, he says, be asking “What does it mean?” rather than “Did it happen?” He then proceeds to play a reading by Hugh Bonneville of his poem “Midnight Mass.” exploring how the Christian message is somewhat lost in the New Year and the Christmas spirit quickly vanishes.
    David asks, has the Church mired the true message – love tolerance, forgiveness etc? He feels that the Church has lost contact with this and tells us “… he doesn’t have many friends amongst bishops.”
    David has been asked many times, why write a poetry book rather than a theological study? He explains that “…a single, short poem can sum up an entire theology … you can take liberties with poems.” He reads us a quote from an endorsement to his book, describing poetry as “…words so twisted and so pressed that they express the matter more densely and more subtly than if they were left to their own devices.”
    The creative process involved David working on his books for a year – one poem was previously written but the rest were all written for the book. The writing of his book, he says, became an obsession. The book has seven chapters, 134 poems. He constantly revised his poems, stripping away until “… the meaning was left.”
    David finishes with one final poem, Sea of Faith which he describes as his “effort to correct some dodgy doctrine.”
    A very thought-provoking talk and a clear demonstration of the power of poetry.

  • Clare Whitfield – Standing Out from the Slush Pile

    A report of Clare Whitfield’s talk to the Hampshire Writers’ Society 8th November 2022

    by Sarah Noon


    Clare is a writer who describes herself as “dull and ordinary.” She talks to us this evening about “Standing out from the slush pile” when submitting work. As well as having two books published, Clare has worked in publishing herself. She has also just signed another two-book deal – the first one expected in September 2024.


    Clare did her Master’s degree in Creative and Critical Writing at the University of Winchester and tells us she is happy to be back (“…it’s handy as at least I know where to park my car.”). Her first book, People of Abandoned Character, was out in October 2020, in the middle of the pandemic. Not good timing she says, but “People actually did lose their lives, so let’s get that in check”. The book is about what might happen if you found out you were married to Jack the Ripper. The Gone and the Forgotten came out in June and is set in Shetland in the 1990’s, about a girl from a family that is full of secrets.


    Clare is 44 years old, married and lives in Bursledon, but is originally from south London. She claims that there is “… nothing remotely interesting about my background or history.” She adds that she is “…from council house stock and working class through and through.” She was the first member of the family to go on to further and higher education. Clare shares that she also has Autistic Spectrum Disorder. She tells us this because, she says, these are all things that she has leaned on to get herself through slush piles.


    She also worked as an editorial assistant for a publishing company. She says this wasn’t as glamorous as it sounds because it was mainly newswriting. However, this experience gave her valuable skills. “Writing news,” she says, ”…is very specific and technical.” Clare also tried freelance writing, but it didn’t work for her as she needed a full-time job. She now works full time as well as being a writer.


    Clare goes on to tell us that whatever route a writer may go down, they will have to manage their own writing career. “No one will do it for you,” she says. Therefore, we should draw upon all our skills and weaknesses in order to succeed. This also applies when it comes to meeting people within the publishing world. The people within it, she says, are “lovely” but the world of publishing can be completely alien. She says that using her skills and experiences to navigate her way through has enabled her to manage meeting people from within the industry.


    She informs us that “self-awareness is the key.” She urges us to question what it is we want and what motivates us. What skills do we have that we can draw upon? She makes no secret of the fact that in order to get a book published, a writer needs to devote many hours a week working to achieve this. She also reminds us to consider that we “…are the product too.” Are we sellable?
    When Clare sent her synopsis of her second book to her agent and her publisher, she was devastated to discover that they did not like it and were not interested. She describes herself at this point as being in “…a pit of despair.”
    What made her refocus was watching a TV series called “The Offer” about the making of the film The Godfather – in particular the blocks that producer Albert Roddy came up against. Clare says that “…the battles to get that film made appear endless.” The series shows Roddy working incredibly hard to re-pitch, bounce back and not give up. The Godfather was not an easy film to get made and Roddy continued until it was competed. Clare describes this as “…a massive message from the universe” to persevere.


    So, what IS a slush pile? Claire tells us that after clarifying with her agent, it is absolutely a real thing – a pile of unsolicited manuscripts that have been sent to a publishing company or agent. She reminds us that to avoid a manuscript being put into a slush pile, there is no big secret “…it’s not magic and fairy dust” she reiterates, “…it’s just hard work.” However, she points out that there are many hoops to jump through, and we have to be able to deal with inevitable rejection effectively. This is where our past experiences can help us get through.


    Clare’s experience as a dancer enabled her to cope with criticism and rejection. She reminds us that everyone will have an opinion about what we do “even friends and family.” But, she says, opinions are often unsolicited. She goes on to show us a list of negative comments that people had said to her before and after her books were published (she gets her revenge by writing them into her books!). Clare points out that this is where our strong sense of self comes into play. Without it, we can be led in all sorts of opposing directions.
    She urges us to set our goals and make logical steps (she is keen to clarify that it is a goal, not a dream). For Clare to do this, she treated it like a project. She shows us a step-by-step spreadsheet that enabled her to achieve her goals.
    A key element of this is getting an agent. Clare reminds us what an agent does (negotiate book deals, sell your book, create publicity, advise on publishers etc). The first and crucial point when sending a manuscript to an agent is to follow the submission rules. “…this is just good manners,” Clare points out. She warns us to follow them to the letter. Clare goes onto advise us on how we should structure our cover letter including an introduction and a synopsis. She points out that having consulted the Writers and Artists Yearbook to establish the best agents to contact, we should tailor our letters to them rather than a “one-size-fits-all” cover letter. This also includes establishing the name of the person to whom you are sending the letter. There should be no “Dear Sir or Madam.” As Clare points out, why should they be bothered if you can’t? She suggests that in our author bios, we should be talking about people in the industry that we may have a connection with (“Agents are people people”). She also reminds us to make sure we include things such as competition awards and magazine articles – this is an industry that thrives upon networking.


    Clare continues by talking about the pitch. She explains that the objective for the pitch is to enable the agent to understand what the book is about in order that they can find the right publisher to sell it. “The pitch is to enable an agent to understand at speed what section of the bookshop you belong in.” She advises us to “…get to the pitch quickly.” She asks us to think about how we might explain a movie to our parents.
    The pitch will include a hook which is the hinge-point to your entire story. It’s the lure that hooks in the reader. Clare says, “the shorter the better” and make clear comparisons to other books and writers. She suggests that we can practise writing hooks by writing pitches for movies or fairy tales. She reminds us that this is not a synopsis (the synopsis should not be longer than one single page; the pitch should be one line and punchy).
    Clare points out that if a synopsis is longer than a page we should consider that we may have too many threads. She also reminds us that a synopsis is not a place for including flowery prose. It is quite simply to relay the story. It should include time, place, protagonist, etc, and any subplots that are important to the ending. There is no need to include any other subplots. And make sure you make the ending clear (some writers are reluctant to give away their ending)! The pitch and the synopsis are not to be confused with the blurb, Clare says.


    Clare is giving us all of this information, not just from her own experiences but by talking to other friends and colleagues in the business. She shared quotes from them with regards to avoiding slush piles and they totally concur with Clare’s advice.
    At the end of her fascinating talk, Clare shows us her first letter to an agent (whilst cringing), claiming “…it’s not perfect, but it worked.”
    Clare’s talk demonstrated what hard work and dedication can achieve, proving that she is far from “dull and ordinary.”

  • Inspired by imagery – December competition results, adjudicated by Susmita Bhattacharya

    It was wonderful to hear about Susmita Bhattacharya’s unique journey to publication, part of which was an acknowledgement of her equal passions of images and words. This led to Susmita setting a brief which gave writers an opportunity to take inspiration from imagery:

    In 300 words, write a short story inspired by Vincent Van Gogh’s Café Terrace at Night.

    And the winners are…

    First Place: Smell the Coffee by John K. Miles

    Second Place: Arles, 1888, Two Years Before He Dies by Alethea Wiles

    Third Place: According To… by Jonathan Plummer

    Highly Commended: The Film Composer’s Wife by Peter Duncan

    Highly Commended: Black Not Blue by Patrick Clements


    First Place: Smell the Coffee by John K. Miles

    I loved the circular format of the story. The sadness of living in the past, not remembering the present. I think it was a moving picture of a relationship, past and present, and a photograph that merged the two together. Well done!

    Susmita Bhattacharya

    A knock at the door. An old lady comes in with a brown paper package under her arm.  

    She looks like Rose. “Hello Rose,” I say.

    “It’s Lauren, dear.”

    There’s a sadness in her eyes. She says, “I brought you something to brighten up your room.”

    I look at the sterile white walls and nod my head.

    “It’s a painting,” she says, ripping off the brown paper packaging. “Of a Cafe in France.”

    I look at it and remember. The smell of fresh coffee on a balmy summer evening. Rose is there of course; my love, my one and only. I remember the feeling; a swirling in my gut, like fallen leaves ascending to the sky in a storm.

    I nod my head. I have no words, they’ve all been said. 

    “Thank you Rose.”

    “It’s Lauren, dear.”

    Rose’s eyes are watering, so I look back at the painting as she places it on my dresser.  

    The Cafe was called ‘Les Saisons’ and we were young.  

    I look up at Rose. She’s old and so am I. Life is complex and bittersweet like the glass of Pastis next to my coffee cup. I reach out for it, but find myself grasping fresh air.

    “I can’t move my legs anymore, Rose.”

    Rose sighs and her eyes water, and I realise that she is remembering too. 

    “It’s Lauren dear,” she says, this time struggling to say the words.

    I look out of the window and when I turn back, Rose is gone. Perhaps she was never there. But there’s a painting on my dresser of a Cafe in France.  

    I look at it and remember. The smell of fresh coffee on a balmy summer evening. Rose is there of course; my love, my one and only. I remember the feeling; a swirling in my gut, like fallen leaves ascending to the sky in a storm.


    Second Place: Arles, 1888, Two Years Before He Dies by Alethea Wiles

    I loved the characterisation of the artist character, and how the narrator observed him, even fantasised about him. The imagery of the cafe and the artist’s observation of the scene was done really well. I loved the concept of a scene within a scene.

    Susmita Bhattacharya

    Jacques and Morin are demanding more absinthe, though they haven’t finished the last round, and I am tired of them. 

    ‘Rachelle!’  

    I turn and nod at Pierre, raise a finger for him to be patient. Two absinthe, one beer. As I head in I glance over to check if the man is still painting on the corner. He set himself up just as the tabac closed and has been staring at us, his paintbrush furious, for at least three hours.  

    I go to the bar and give George my order. 

    ‘He still out there?’ he asks, filling glasses with cheap, blinding, shit. 

    I nod and slide the drinks on to my tray. 

    ‘He better not come in here,’ he mutters. 

    The painter was here last night, drinking glass after glass of wine, staring at the sky. 

    He was alone. More than just solitary. I felt sorry for him so I tried to be friendly. 

    ‘What’s up there,’ I said. ‘That has you so spellbound?’ 

    After a long moment he turned to me, his thin face full of  hollow wonder. 

    ‘Stars,’ he said. ‘Maybe God.’ 

    His eyes were too bright. I shrugged and left him to his wine. 

    He couldn’t pay his tab. George pushed him into the gutter, told him not to show his face again.  

    But here he is, painting us, the cafe, the patrons. It feels like a punishment, or revenge. 

    Pierre lights his pipe and nods his head, staring in the same direction as me. 

    ‘Your new lover?’ He says. 

    ‘Drink your beer,’ I say. ‘Silly old man.’ 

    But on the way back I imagine myself lying under him, his breath warm with wine, as paint soaks through my dress, filling me with stars, infecting me with loneliness.  


    Third Place: According To… by Jonathan Plummer

    I loved the juxtaposition of the setting – the romantic French reverie to the stark reality of the narrator’s present situation. The dynamics between the two characters was done really well – I could feel their easy-going relationship and how much she meant to him by the way he expressed his love for her. Well done!

    Susmita Bhattacharya

    The café was nearly deserted. Saint-Remy’s aperitif hour crowd had drifted away for dinner. Ed was glad the bustle had died down. Sitting at his pavement café table he considered the scene: in front of him his glass of Pouilly-Fuisse had been served at exactly the right temperature and, somewhere, softly a radio was playing an accordion tune that came to him gently on the warm night air, seemingly the same way the local night scent of lavender, rosemary and fresh pine reached his nostrils. 

    “Yer tea!”  

    Mack slapped down a chipped mug of industrial strength tea on the Formica topped table and Ed, his reverie abruptly ended, realised he was not outside the Café Bouffon nearly forty years ago, but was, instead, in Mack’s Caff on the High Street. At his left the condensation coated window kept the dreary November morning at bay. The table was decorated not with a glass of white wine and a Pernod branded ashtray, but a red plastic tomato shaped ketchup dispenser, greasy salt and pepper pots and two plates of fried eggs on toast flanked by cheap, dulled cutlery.  

    “That’s better.”  

    Back from what was optimistically called “The Ladies”, Joan slipped onto the green plastic covered seat opposite Ed and smoothed her zip up fleece. 

    “I’m thinking of learning to play the accordion”, he said. 

    “Oh really,” she replied, raising an eyebrow. 

    “Yes, really.” 

    Joan pulled a piece of paper and a pen from her handbag and made a note. 

    “What are you writing?” 

    “Oh”, said Joan, “Just adding ear plugs to my shopping list.” 

    Joan smiled slyly at him, Ed laughed. 

    Sitting at a cafe table drinking wine in Southern France on a warm summer’s evening was one thing, but anytime, anywhere with Joan was better. 


    Highly Commended: The Film Composer’s Wife by Peter Duncan

     I loved the references to real people, the witty conversation and loved the way the cold was described with the senses of taste and the poor dog from Martinique shivering under the table. 

    Susmita Bhattacharya

    I was puzzling over my dog-eared copy of Paris Pratique at the top of Rue du Mont Cenis as darkness slowly descended on Montmartre. Were these long flights of steps trailing down to murky streets below the ones appearing in that famous black-and-white photograph? I recalled its cobbles and line of streetlamps melting into vague bright early morning light but still had no clue if I was looking at them now. 

    ‘Brassai, huh?’ 

    Her voice startled me. ‘That photograph…’ 

    ‘Yep. These aren’t the steps, though. The Brassai ones are by the funicular. Easy mistake. Everything around here seems like it’s from a goddammed picture.’ She looked at me carefully. ‘Don’t you think?’ 

     She was tall and thin. Scarves muffled her face. At her feet was a tiny dog. She said it had been rescued from Martinique. I felt a stab of sympathy for the mutt, plucked from tropical sunshine to trail the soiled sidewalks of Paris. Surely its Caribbean life was never so bad?  

    I followed her gaze along the cobbled street to a square. Tables were set beneath a long yellow awning. 

    ‘Wrong again.’ She smiled through all those scarves. ‘Van Gogh’s café was in Arles. But I could definitely use a drink.’ 

    We sat in bitter cold. I sipped my wine, nearly gasping in shock at its icy chill. She told me her husband was a film music composer. At dinner parties in their apartment overlooking the steps that weren’t Brassai’s, the guests were other composers: Alexandre Desplat, Philippe Sarde, Hans Zimmer. 

    City light clouded the night sky. Soundtracks echoed in my mind. She asked where I was staying. Hope bubbled within me. 

    ‘Okay, I’ll walk you to the funicular. At least you can see those goddammed steps before you leave.’ 

    Beneath the table, the dog shivered. 


    Highly Commended: Black Not Blue by Patrick Clements

    I thought this was quite fun in the way there was a twist in the end – I did not see that coming. I thought the sharp observations were very well done.

    Susmita Bhattacharya

    That’s the picture I want them to see. Stars in a blue sky, warm yellow light. Colour and romance. The café has yellow canopies and white-topped tables still, but a century has passed. The sky is black, not blue. Of course. But sure – live that dream. Let art replace reality. 

    Americans are best, preferably women. Seeking a life-saving colour transfusion. 

    And there’s a likely prospect. Fifty, her hair dyed yellow, blue eyes, wedding ring, aspirationally romantic hat. Furtively comparing a postcard picture to reality. And oh, so obviously American. 

    “Still charming, is it not?” And so am I. 

    “Sometimes I think I feel his spirit here.” My furrowed brow. 

    “Though I never can seem to hold it.” My rueful half grin. “How about you?” 

    She smiles. We talk. Charlotte from Chicago. Escaping a tour group this evening to find the real France. Of course. What soul! Our eyes meet. 

    An absinthe in the café. One must do that, Charlotte, and I cannot drink alone. 

    She comes along nicely. Time to consider options. Jewellery and credit cards are profitable, but photographs in my hotel room give a better income stream, and I have substances with me to make it easy. Absinthe covers any taste. 

    She knows about pouring absinthe through sugar, and I let her do it. We drink to Vincent and enchantment. 

    She seems somehow familiar now. But I’m tired, my mind is wandering. Charlotte touches her eyes, and now they are black, not blue. Reality has replaced art. My tongue is numb. She puts on glasses and a dark scarf over her head, and I remember her. 

    “Yes,” she says. “Contacts and a little work, and Annie becomes Charlotte. You destroyed me. Turnabout is fair play.” 

    The colours are dimming. 

    The absinthe. Of course. 

    Now there is only black. 

  • January 10th: Nate Crowley

    January 10th: Nate Crowley

    Join us at the University of Winchester, Winton Room 5, where our main speaker will be author Nate Crowley and our special guest is children’s poet Val Harris. We’ll also have the results of the January competition and announcement of the competition for February.

    Talks are free for members. Non-members £10, students £2.

    Playing with other people’s toys: the pros and cons of work for hire writing

    Having written novels both with traditional publishers and as a freelancer for the Warhanmer 40,000 IP, Nate Crowley makes a practical comparison of his experiences in these two very different professional models, and offers his thoughts on making the best of both worlds

    Nate Crowley is an author, interactive fiction consultant, videogames journalist and public speaker.
    Nate has worked as a journalist, a publisher, a teacher and an aquarium guy. He has a degree which involved all sorts of stuff but basically ended up being about the history of natural history. He enjoys a good trip to the zoo, creating feasts, and staring into the wasteland behind his house. He loves to talk about beasts and SF and the sea, plus history and films and all kinds of nerd stuff.

    Special Guest: Val Harris

    Val will talk about writing and publishing in general and her own journey to writing poetry for children, why it’s important, how much it is appreciated by schools, and how little exposure it receives from booksellers. 

    Val Harris is a children’s poet and has had her poems published in several children’s publications including:The Caterpillar, Paperbound Magazine, The Toy Press, Little Thoughts Press, and she has multiple poems flying on the Dirigible Balloon, an online poetry resource for schools and individuals.  Val has been writing for many years.  She has published several adult books. She is passionate about poetry for children. It is an invaluable tool for helping children to understand language, as well as giving them confidence to write and to express themselves through poetry.  

  • Jenny Savill – Literary Agent

    Hampshire Writers’ Society meeting 11th October 2022

    Report by Sarah Noon

    Jenny has been a literary agent with Andrew Nurnberg Associates since 2002, and has a large list of writers who she represents across all genres.  The agency, based in London, was established in 1977 and has authors from across the world. The company also deals with translation rights which oversees the translation of English-written books into other languages. Andrew Nurnberg Associates consists of a team of agents, each with their own list of writers.

    Jenny first asks us “Why have an agent?”  As she points out, many writers self-publish as well as taking other routes to publication. Jenny admits that she knows very little about self-publication and acknowledges that many writers have achieved this successfully. Jenny explains that the writers she represents need time to write and therefore rely on their agent to manage the business elements of their work. She points out that if you are writing full-time, it is a business and “…contracts can be long and complicated.”  The Society of Authors provides advice on contracts etc., but an agent, she explains, will be there “…to do the business for you and guide you as your career progresses.” On this point, Jenny tells us that she spends more time managing writers whose contracts are ending, and considering new literary directions, rather than launching new writers at the start of their career.

    Agents have the expertise to negotiate the best deals for authors and to ensure money is coming in for them. They have contacts consisting of editors and publishers and know the best ones for a particular market or genre.

    Jenny tells us what rights the agency deal with:

    • English language rights – across English speaking world
    • Translation rights (can be sold separately)
    • Serial rights
    • Audio rights
    • Dramatic – film and theatre
    • Digital / ebook rights
    • Gaming rights
    • Merchandising rights

    Jenny explains that there are benefits to signing up to an agency such as Andrew Nurnberg, which handles foreign rights. Jenny has a number of colleagues in foreign countries who all speak the language of those countries.  Jenny meets with them once a week and discusses the writers and books she has on her lists and then shares information as to which books might be successful outside of the UK. This creates opportunities for “…a lot of joined-up thinking” across countries. As she points out, Jenny’s colleagues know the markets for their countries “…inside-out.” Jenny demonstrates her understanding of international trends in literature, telling us, for example, that thrillers do not do very well in Brazil, but romance does. In France, she continues, romance does not do so well, but crime does. Jenny shows us how covers for the same book, differ across various countries in order to more appeal to that particular demographic.

    So what happens when Jenny or one of her colleagues takes on an author? She explains that the writer will receive a letter (a representation agreement) which details what will be done for the author – including commission rates (15% on UK deals).

    Jenny discusses marketing and explains that whilst there was an expectation a few years ago for a writer to be present on social media, due to what Jenny describes as a “toxic” environment, many agents are now happy for writers not to be on social media platforms.  Turning up to bookshops for signings is always good, and many larger publishers provide courses to help writers with social media and technology.

    Once a writer is ready to submit work to an agent, they need to establish the submission requirements. These are on the agency’s website – just like all agencies. Information can also be found in “The Writer’s and Artists’ Yearbook” which lists all the literary agents and what they represent.  Jenny warns that no reputable agency will charge a reading fee, and to avoid those that do. Every agency is different, Jenny tells us, so “…do your research.” Applicants should ensure their whole novel is compete and they have an idea of what else they will be working on in the future (ideally in a similar genre or style).

    She advises writers to get used to constructive feedback and be prepared to edit work. After publication, criticism does not stop and so it is useful to be able to manage this. Jenny also suggests that new writers are able to manage their financial expectations.  Advances, she tells us, are not what they used to be.  Many of her writers still have day-jobs as well as writing.  However, with a smaller advance, writers have more chance to “earn-out” and begin to earn royalties (a percentage of every copy sold).

    Jenny urges us to ask ourselves “the big question” – Is your manuscript ready? The most common reason why submissions fail to get past Jenny’s inbox, she says, is because they’re simply not ready. A big part of realising whether your novel is ready or not is to re-read your piece several times. But she accepts that the more times we read our work, the closer we get to it and the less objective we become. She advises us to put our work away for a month or so. After this, Jenny guarantees we will find things that need doing – either small edits, or large structural things. This will ensure that our work is as good as it can be before it is submitted to an agency. Jenny also tells us that we should be reading around our genre, “If you want to write, you have to read lots as well.” Consider where we want to be in the bookshop. It is also important to research the market.  A writer needs to demonstrate that they know the market, and that there is a place in the market for their chosen genre.

    Jenny talks to us about the issue of outside editors.  She explains that if a writer is repeatedly sending the same manuscript and not getting anywhere, then it may be worth getting work scrutinised by an outside editor.  However, she warns of the danger of one smoothing out issues too much, resulting in the removal of the writer’s voice altogether. As Jenny reminds us “It’s the voice that we’re most interested in.” Jenny advises writers to ensure that any agency or consultancy has very good reviews – particularly word-of-mouth.

    Jenny helpfully goes through a list of things we should check before any submission:

    • Go through manuscript and ensure characters are behaving authentically and that there are no “spare” characters.
    • Ensure all scenes start at the latest possible point, and end at the earliest possible point (watch a well-edited film for a demonstration – Jenny recommends Toy Story) – nothing extraneous.
    • Don’t tell the reader everything (craft). This prevents the reader from switching off.
    • Creatively incorporate the backstory – there doesn’t need to be a whole chunk of backstory.
    • Show not tell (“she shivered” not “she was cold”).
    • Check spelling and grammar manually.
    • Check the size and spacing of manuscript is what the agency asks for.
    • Consider why you want to tell this story – make sure that doesn’t get lost.
    • Consider who we want to tell it to. This helps with pitching tone and content.
    • Ensure we know what is at the heart of our story.
    • Does everything need to be in there?
    • Is any reported action better than seeing the action (and vice-versa)?

    Most agents will require a synopsis with submission. Jenny informs us that writers are generally “…quite bamboozled by them.”  It needs to be a sheet of A4, explaining chronologically what happens in the story from beginning to end in a straightforward way – beginning, middle, end. The purpose of the synopsis is NOT to sell the book, but rather to allow the agent to ensure that its narrative is on track. Jenny advises us that a way to do this is to number the events in the story from one to ten.  That will provide what Jenny refers to as a “…skeleton synopsis.” This can then be expanded into paragraphs. Jenny adds that a skeleton synopsis is a useful exercise to do at any point in the writing process, not just at the end. A synopsis does NOT need a backstory.

    A covering letter will also be needed. Jenny explains that this is just a polite and business-like letter with a little bit about why the particular agent has been chosen. The letter should also explain the age of the reader, and its genre, and how the book may fit into the marketplace. Jenny recommends including the blurb in the body of the letter. Finally, personalise the letter with information about any experience, jobs etc. Jenny understands that a writer is likely to send letters out to a variety of agents, but gives the advice that they should ensure that they let agents know if they receive offers from another agent.

    Jenny’s advice is, as always, invaluable to any writer and has been very much appreciated by the members of the society this evening.

  • Enthusiasm & Restraint:  Gregory Sayer

    Tuesday 11th October 2022

    Report by Sarah Noon

    Gregory writes historical fiction and his debut novel, set in Hampshire, is entitled “Looking Through the Lace Curtains.” It is a family saga set in the 20th century.  Gregory is currently working on his second novel.  He is here to talk to us about the learning curve of a new writer (although he describes it as a vertical line rather than a curve!) and the ins and outs of publishing one’s first book.

    Gregory is originally from Petersfield, although has not lived there for some time. He talks about how when leaving one’s home, one will “…look back many years later with a certain amount of affection.” This, he explains, is one of the reasons why he wrote his first novel.  He talks about the drive which many writers have – his being to leave a tribute to those “… who went to hell and back” in the late 19th century / early 20th century.

    Sharing his thoughts about a new writer’s learning curve, Gregory describes it as “…your very own mini Everest.” Adding “…it’s not easy.” However, he says that when writing historical fiction – where the writer is dealing with history – it means that there is some structure already there “…to cling on to.” He goes on to express his admiration for those who are able to write from an empty page.

    He describes looking back through Petersfield’s history and events in his life as …”looking in your rear-view mirror.” He explains that there is a blind spot which you know is there but you don’t know what is in it. He continues, “You can see a car coming up to overtake you, then it’s gone.”

    “Looking Through The Lace Curtains” stems from a letter that was written in 1994, but unknown to the majority of his family until 2010. The letter was from two sisters in Australia, trying to trace their ancestors. Their father (Freddie) had been born in 1909, and his story began somewhere in England.  The two sisters had travelled to England and visited London and Petersfield to try and find out more about where their family came from. Initially, Gregory tells us, they were “…greeted with silence.” But they eventually found family, and went back to Australia in 1994 with many documents. When the sisters’ letter was discovered in 2010, Gregory tells us that there was “…a moral decision to be made,” knowing that delving into family history may bring to light things which may upset others.

    Gregory decided that he did want to find out more about his family and the sisters, and he enrolled on a Master’s Degree course in order to “…set himself up to write.” This got Gregory back into the habit of writing.  He then went on to research his story of Gertrude and her son Freddy who travelled to Australia as one of its “home children.”

    Freddie had told his two daughters what he wanted them to know and what he remembered about his childhood, but Gregory tells us, there were still “…many blind spots.” This issue led him to the issue of “Fact versus Fiction” – can the two meet? However, alluding to the point he made earlier, Gregory reminds us that was not starting with a blank page, as he already had a huge subject “…that needs to be dealt with.” It is, he says, “…a question of organisation.” Gregory also tells us that the era in which his story is set (WW1, suffragettes etc.) means that there is a huge background to put in place, which also requires a huge amount of organisation.

    One of the first questions Gregory tells us he asked himself was “How many people do I keep in? How many people do I take out?” He also considered the timeline – should there be flashbacks etc. to explore others’ points of view? He explains that he is also mindful of the fact that his story would affect people still living today who are part of the family. He considered whether there would be possibilities of libel and slander.  He explains that he balanced this with the fact that he was making “…an honest attempt…” and was doing his research thoroughly. With this aim, Gregory tells us that he obtained many official documents such as reports, birth certificates and public notices.  He goes on to say that these documents gave him the structure for his story. Other tools a writer has, says Gregory, then enable the writer to give sentiment to the story.

    Gregory reminds us that before social media was around, people would write several postcards a day to each other, and these sorts of things are often to be found in families’ attics etc. He says that these sorts of things give us “… a notion of the attitudes of the time,” and describes them as “vital” and adds sentiment and emotion to a historical story. 

    However, Gregory then goes on to show us several images of letters, photographs and documents pertaining to the family, and discusses the internal struggle between fact and emotion that these images create.

    The second half of Gregory’s talk, explores the pressures of self-publication. He suggests that even when self-publishing, a writer still needs an agent or someone to assist, as it is “… a monumental task.” Gregory also reminds us that we need an editor. This he tells us, is not always an easy relationship, but it needs to be with someone the writer can trust. Gregory also advises us to ensure we are ready before we go for the final print, as once a writer is committed, the deadlines which loom can create a great deal of pressure.

    Gregory ends his talk by sharing with us his three aims when he wrote his book:

    • A tribute
    • A testimony
    • A reminder

    We wish Gregory success with his forthcoming second novel.

    Gregory Sayer’s website: https://gregorysayer.wordpress.com/

  • Mark Eyles: How to Publish a book on Amazon

    Report by Sarah Noon from Mark’s talk to HWS on 14th June 2022

    Mark is an active member of the HWS committee and is therefore a familiar face to most of us at the society.  He has recently self-published his first novel, a science-fiction story entitled Icefall Cities, on Amazon and is here this evening to talk us through how he achieved this, and the pitfalls he encountered along the way.

    He chose Amazon, he explains, as at the time it was the market leader for E-books (he stresses that he is not talking about paper books at this stage, although he plans to attempt this soon).  Amazon also incorporates Kindle Unlimited, and Mark says that he believes that using Amazon and Kindle will enable his book to reach as many people as possible. He also feels that the method for publishing on Amazon is relatively straightforward. Amazon automatically assigns their books with an ASIN number, and if the user has an Amazon account, then they can sign in using that. Once a user has signed in, they can begin the process towards publication!

    There are, Mark says, many help topics available and lots of online support (if anything, too much and this can be overwhelming). However, all the information is there.

    Writers considering publishing their work on Amazon, need to decide whether they are going to do it as a business or a sole trader – there are pros and cons for both.  If you decide to publish as a business then corporation tax must be paid, and once the decision has been made, it cannot be reversed. Mark decided to do it as a business, using a limited company he set up a few years ago called Ambient Quest Studios (he set it up online using Rapid Formations https://www.rapidformations.co.uk/).  He explains that this is straightforward to do online.

    Mark tells us that there are some downsides to using Amazon, of which we should be aware. The most significant is that publishing through Amazon prevents you from publishing your work on multiple platforms (for this he suggests using something like Draft2Digital). Another downside is that when you sell your book, you need an ISBN number. If you do not use your own ISBN then the publishing platform (i.e. Amazon) will issue you with one and you will not be able to publish that edition on other platforms.  However, you can buy your own ISBNs from Nielsens in the UK (https://www.nielsenisbnstore.com/Home/Isbn).

    When a manuscript is ready, then it needs to be converted into the correct format.  Mark explains how to access Kindle Create – a free piece of software that Amazon provide (https://www.amazon.com/Kindle-Create/b?ie=UTF8&node=18292298011). It is, he says “pretty straight forward to use.” It essentially involves uploading your document and allowing the software to convert it for you.  Prompts are given for title pages etc.  Kindle Create also allows the writer to adjust spacing and indents. However, as Mark points out, when reading on a Kindle the reader has the option to change the font size and spacing, and so the format is not about focusing on what the final book looks like, unlike more traditional publishing software.

    Mark goes onto talk to us about cover artwork.  Amazon recommends some programs for this, but Mark used a version of Photoshop (Canva and GIMP are also a good ones). He advises writers to ensure that their artwork looks good in black and white and as a thumbnail, as well as the front cover (the thumbnail, he says, is one of our biggest sales tools).

    With the manuscript and the artwork now formatted and uploaded, the book is now ready to be exported onto Amazon. This too, is quite straightforward, but Mark warns us that the use of subtitles, categories and keywords etc. is “…a whole other talk.”

    Pricing the book is another issue that the writer has to consider. Mark explains that because Amazon is an international company, the options come up in a variety of currencies.  However, if books are priced between £1.77 and £9.99 and you are exclusive to Amazon you can select a 70% royalty rate.

    The writer can then decide upon under which categories the book will be listed – up to two can be selected. Amazon will then automatically assign further categories, dependent upon your title, subtitle and keywords. On the subject of keywords, Mark suggests a useful piece of software called Publisher Rocket (https://publisherrocket.com/ ), which costs just under £80, but there is also a free trial version. This enables you to try out a variety of keywords, and see how far down a list of searches they would appear.

    Final stages before publishing includes the book description, which Mark describes as “…a bit of a dark art” but is he reminds us “vitally important.” He also points out that there is lots of help available for this. Also included in the final phase is the author page.

    Finally, the writer can hit the “Publish” button! The screen will say that it can take up to three days to publish, but Mark’s book took about two hours.

    We congratulate Mark on the success of publishing his book and wish him success.

  • Judith Heneghan: Fact into Fiction

    Hampshire Writers Society, 13th September 2022

    Report by Sarah Noon

    Judith is a lecturer and writer. She has written many non-fiction books for children. Her first novel for adults, Snegurochka, was nominated for the Edward Stanford Travel Award. This evening, Judith is talking to us about how experiences influence our writing – when fact is used to create fiction and where the boundary between the two lies.  She asks us, “is fiction just the stuff we make up?” and maintains, that we can’t avoid real life entering fiction.

    Judith uses as an example, the novel “The Dig” by John Preston. It is extremely well-researched, she explains, but is nevertheless fiction.  The characters within the novel are real people, but are fictionalised via their first person perspective.  There are divergences between the real and imaginary versions of the characters. She also discusses the novel “The Fall Guy” by James Lasdun.  Here the writer uses real places in the novel (a psychological thriller set in upstate New York). The place names are made up, as well as street names, the shops, the artisan bakery etc., and this allows for a degree of fiction. “Author Author” by David Lodge and “The Master” by Colm Toibin are both novels written about Henry James. Despite this, they are very different books and Henry James come across as a completely different person in both. Yet another example Judith gives of fiction stemming from fact.

    Judith reminds us that as writers we are free to be inspired by real people and places.  We can change the names and other elements. Using this type of inspiration allows us to get into the heads of people and explore their perspective. 

    Judith tells us about how she lived in Kyiv from 1992-1994.  With regards to Snegurochka, she says she “did her homework”. She talks about queuing up for bread, fruit picking, watching the locals… She tells us about how hard life was when she first went out there as a young mum with a baby in a foreign country, unable to speak the language and a husband who was working hard.

    She took dozens of photographs and made notes on gridded notepaper (she shows us some of these notes and photographs),  explaining that she didn’t really know why she did this, other than a vague idea that she wanted to write something.  She studied many maps and read lots of books, all with the aim of creating something “…authentic and real.”

    Judith used an old instamatic camera – before the days of digital. This, she says, gives the images a sense of age. Judith conveys her fascination for the place. She knew she wanted to write about it, but wasn’t sure what exactly she was going to write. She knew she didn’t want to write a guide book.  She considered a memoir, but soon dismissed the idea. She wanted to protect the privacy of her family, and also felt that her life wasn’t that interesting.  She also confesses to the fact that she “… couldn’t help making stuff up.”  Despite the collection of notes and photos, it was actually over twenty years before Judith wrote her novel Snegurochka. The title is from a Russian and Ukrainian folk tale about a couple who can’t have children so they create one out of snow. Lenin took two folk tales and morphed them together in order to create a winter tale, when endeavouring to move away from Christian society.

    Judith explains that there are parallels between her characters and real people she encountered (for example her protagonist, Rachael, is not Judith but there are similarities). Rachael is terrified of the balcony and will not go on it.  Judith explains how she knew the protagonist couldn’t be her, with her upbringing, child and partner, but she tells us how she drew on feelings that connected to the story.  She remembers being scared of losing her brother’s camera off the Eiffel Tower and connects that to the feelings the balcony in the novel conjures up for Rachael. Judith’s husband being away from the flat, enabled her to focus on her protagonist’s isolation which is exacerbated by being terrified of the balcony and has to protect her child. Making Rachel English in a non-English-speaking country also adds to her the isolation. Judith explains that she felt people were angry with her, but she never knew why, adding to her feeling like an outsider – another facet to Rachael’s character.

    Using these examples, Judith demonstrates how our own experiences as a new writer can give us confidence “No one can question the experiences we’ve had.”  Judith tells us that those real-life moments are “…like stills and snapshots…” and the fiction is the moving images in between them.

    Despite these connections being made, Judith reiterates that the final characters are not real. The character of Lucas, she says, is not like her husband at all, and with hindsight, would give him another profession in order to separate reality from fiction even further.

    Judith continues with other examples – a photo of her husband’s hand with a cigarette. This formed the narrative of the twelve-year-old boy on the balcony above, describing looking down and smelling the smoke wafting up from beneath him.

    The caretaker of the apartments, Judith describes as a “type”. Someone always watching everyone. She explains that to avoid it being a cliché she needed to make the character more rounded. Judith took parts of characters she saw in order to create more depth. It was a lady who when Judith was out shopping in Kyiv one day, began pulling at her hair, who finally became the Caretaker in Snegurochka.

    In Kyiv, Judith was commissioned to find the prices of various products for the diplomats. Whilst doing this with her baby in his pushchair, she met a man in a white-goods shop who began stroking her baby’s head. This experience unsettled her – but became the basis of Mikala the racketeer.

    Judith also tells us about an area near her flat that was poor and “shambolic”, but was built on prime real-estate.  A Swedish couple bought a cottage belonging to an old lady. One day she returned to pick her apples, arguing that whilst she had sold her house, she had not sold the land around it – a conflict that triggered the idea for her book.

    She has many stories, she says, but didn’t use them all.  She reminds us that these events must be there to serve the story. However, she admits this can be hard sometimes.

    Whist some writers “make everything up.”, Judith considers that she made bolder decisions as a result of basing characters and events on her own experiences.  She says she needed the confidence of writing about what she knows.

    Judith is asked about the photos that form the collage on the front cover of her book.  She explains that they were not specifically taken for the book, but were actually taken for personal memories.  She admits that she was not comfortable with the cover designer’s decision.

    Thinking about the city twenty years later, when Judith began writing the book, she says she’s not sure if her descriptions are accurate. She describes this as “psycho-geography” in which she had created her own place.  Judith returned to Kyiv in 2018. She says that it had changed and was now full of young people and families out and about. It possessed a greater sense of prosperity – a rather poignant comment in the light of the war the Ukraine is now fighting.

    When using real experiences as a way to create fiction, Judith urges us to consider changing one thing and ask “… what if?” She did this in Kyiv, when looking at people on the trolley-busses and wondering what their world was like – to consider “cause and effect.” Finding connections between real events is what provides the fiction.  It is this turning of “fact into fiction” that gives Snegurochka its sense of realism and truth.

    Judith’s second novel set in upstate New York and she is once again using her experience in order to create fiction.  We wish her every success with her new book.

    You can find out more about Judith on her website: http://judithheneghan.co.uk/

  • Treasurer’s Report 2021/2022

    After a long year and a half dominated by COVID, in September 2021, the Hampshire Writers’ Society cautiously began a new season. COVID was still very much on all our minds and we weren’t sure if members would return.

    Our old treasurer stepped down, and I became the new treasurer.

    We also faced a new financial challenge. In previous years the University of Winchester had kindly permitted us to hold meetings in the Stripe Theatre without any charge. The HWS doesn’t have any formal connection with the university. In 2021, they decided we would have to pay for room hire.

    As a non-profit organisation, the Hampshire Writers Society aims to spend most of its income every year. In previous years, we sometimes made a small loss, sometimes a small profit.

    The cost of hiring rooms was a considerable new expense, and it wasn’t obvious we could afford it. We certainly couldn’t afford the Stripe Theatre.

    Income

    The HWS does not receive any grants or other external funding. Our income comes almost entirely from member subscriptions, with a minor contribution from sales of visitor tickets for talks.

    Member numbers grew steadily through the year, ending at over 90 members.

    Expenses

    Our major expenditures were on speaker fees and expenses, and on room hire. We kept spending on non-essentials to a minimum.

    Over the year, this is how your subscription fees were spent:

    Overall

    We ended the year with a small loss. This impacts our reserve (the savings we keep), so we start the next year with a bit less in the bank. However our reserve is still healthy; we aren’t about to go broke.

    Changes

    To increase our income, for the year 2022/23 we have raised the membership fee. To reduce expenses, we are lowering what we pay our main speakers, though we also decided to start paying a small fee to some guest speakers, which we feel is appropriate for the value they provide.

    Outlook for 2022/2023

    Unfortunately, in January 2022 the university raised the room hire charges. The changes to speaker payments should in theory deliver substantial savings (as much as half) , but we can’t be sure of that, as the expenses requested by speakers are unpredictable and sometimes larger than the fees. So we still expect to make a loss, though hopefully a small one.

    The good news is that with most of last year’s members renewing, we currently have over 80 members, and can hope this will grow through the year.

    So please remember to recommend the Hampshire Writers’ Society to your writing friends and acquaintances. Whatever their interest and level of experience, we love to welcome new members. And if they’re not ready to join, they can still subscribe to the newsletter just by entering their email address on our website.